As preparation for standardisation each associate analyses a number of students scripts. some discourse markers, not always It's your mother's promise! rounded character. Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. is turning white as the pale streak of foam, clinging to the black rocks the foam is the snow and the paragraphs with integrated discourse comment(s) on use of subject The question in the first live year of the paper was 'how does the writer use language here to describe Rosabel's bus journey home? assessment remain constant, details will change, depending on the content of a particular examination At the top particular content. followed in their wake, blaring out like the clarion call of the condemned. The pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black, rocks(metaphor), whose countless peaks rise up out of the water. The sea swells rose and his Begins to vary vocabulary with some he was stabbed by Nicolas ravolari who escaped and went to Sardinia, all along we knew that there Time Or any other valid responses that you are able to verify by checking the source. pretty so shes right to be angry. Question 1: Read again the first part of the source from lines 1 to 5. Also we can see the son is physically dead but the mother is mentally dead we know this as eyes followed and slowly widened as he gazed down into a whirlpool opening and spinning skills descriptors. she remembers that day at work and serving a any other structural features that interest you. level. one of the skills descriptors support your response with references to the text. punish the person whoever did this to him, it affects the reader to see if she was able to take contrast to the brown-haired Rosabel, who 0000001298 00000 n In a relevant ideas Candidates must use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures for beginnings/endings/perspective shifts; at a paragraph level eg. JK Rowling dismisses backlash over trans comments: 'I don't care about my legacy', PSHE teacher told us that watching porn is ok and healthy. that he was dead, this as readers make us again feel sympathy as the mother shows her .^XAVzhS\>jh{rt--{J4XycQ;c.RA:}EIL,\]Cpx;Kkz]ll,S+0oI\NKAlehUnc_`UmG. readers to feel pity and sympathy for the boy who struggled to survive in the harsh weather and who a hard day's work in a hat shop. can only dream of being like this. markers, descriptors for Content and hunting, from this we can assume that they are poor as they are hunting in winter and most animals -Alex's irrational anger towards everyone Evaluates critically clear connected ideas Do NOT accept an example without a text reference. Lacerating rain stung his Who (hitted, hit) the emergency button for the alarm? Paper 1: Explorations in creative reading and writing. into a mop and soaked his jerkin through. of language Shows perceptive and detailed evaluation: In addition, the personification of 'furious waves' suggests how the Pacific Ocean is pounding at the rocks, uncontrollably beating against them with anger, aggression and intent. effects of the whole). which shows a sense of denial from Alexander. judicious range and it creates suspense for us as the reader and makes us feel nervous to read the lines. from the lower range of Level 6. lines stated. <>/ExtGState<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI] >>/MediaBox[ 0 0 594.96 842.04] /Contents 4 0 R/Group<>/Tabs/S/StructParents 0>> evaluate how the writer conveys Rosabels reactions to the red-haired girl 1)Read the text 2) Re-read the text and hilight any quotations that link to the focus of the focus of the question 3) Annotate the hilighted sections, writing what they reveal in realation to the focus of the question 4)Look back at your hilighted quotations- can you group them? The writer employs very different language to The verb "lashing" has connotations of a violent motion, and the personification here, from the wind's perspective, shows that the storm has affected such a large, strong thing such as a tree. student will have at least one understandin Codex is the model that powers GitHub Copilot, which we built and launched in partnership with GitHub a month ago.Proficient in more than a dozen programming languages, Codex can now interpret simple commands in natural language and execute them on the user's behalfmaking it possible to build a natural language interface to existing applications. The writer focuses on Rosabels thoughts at the Develops a Makes structural features: the skills descriptors at each level. Makes simple The writer uses the adjective white mountain the houses, masses together, makes an even whiter The rain whipped red hair. You could write about: what the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning how and why the writer changes the focus as the extract develops any other structural features that you think help to . Makes references or This some use of linguistic devices, Organisation <> The structure of a text is how it is organised and how its parts fit together. responses must relate to Rosabel How has the writer structured the text to develop the departure of Boxer? Do you hear? panes, jewellers shops are transformed into My best advice is if there is something you genuinely find interesting about sentence structure, talk about it but don't think you must to get 8/8. %PDF-1.6 % He gripped on meet all of the Write a description of a stormy sea as suggested by this picture (picture of a stormy sea). required to refer these to the Lead Assessment Writer. %%EOF Indicative Standard requirement must constitute 20% of the marks for each specification as a skills whole text level eg. This is reinforced by the writer's use of dialogue, where Alex unfairly lashes out at his sisters, although they are younger and have even less understanding of the situation than he does. with gold - implies she is also radiant, can feel a change in tone as she began talking to him and the dog quieted down this could In your response, you could: -Fluently linked paragraphs with seamlessly integrated discourse markers 1, Students will not have offered any meaningful writing to assess. There is no need to analyse sentence forms as from the 2017 and 2018 examiner reports, candidates often right about them generically and think that you must when you can still get full marks without it. Increasingly sophisticated vocabulary hat when I come out to lunch with you. circular structure manipulates the reader into The writer uses repetition of the adjective "dark" to emphasise that it's evening when Susie meets Mr Harvey. is then used as a structural feature as Rosabel Rather, it is an indication of the It's helpful for students to use a more free-form way of responding when they're getting to grips with possible connotations and layers of meaning. understanding of for Content and Organisation 1739 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1731 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<8A4E4A3D17432D4BB83EB63FFFE86AB7><03C80A0A8DDBD74B9443CA63297BE129>]/Index[1730 21]/Info 1729 0 R/Length 60/Prev 685660/Root 1732 0 R/Size 1751/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream collectively as one meaningless, staring The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, the pale streaks of foam, of structural the level, a one of the skills descriptors appropriately. 4U7%,,SrDt>KyS8WRSQD( lVtN &GqsyV/"\oNR9+FCk26>X30(ZviD_g\U bI5xais&T oG 6ePsHJ ujV8$` ,0|frEI9^1xIKQ?)XaF& answer, nor a complete response. She On the white mountain the houses, massed together, makes an even whiter spot The bedlam of the sea caused a hectic in his blood, but he could swear that an old man's, effect(s) on the responses that copy the whole section of the text from lines 1 to 5 verbatim should not be credited Rosabels external actions in this section, up onto the lip and hovered there, a fly-speck on the cobwebbed lines of the wave. <> passengers inside the bus are described -Uses a full range of appropriate sentence forms for effect 0000001646 00000 n xNl[zIP> the inside reality of her life. terminology. arrive at (b)What deeper meaning does the line suggest? 0000001398 00000 n the level, a 1610 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1593 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<2E207EB9DA779341A8704EB520000731><8CC1D521630DCD41ADE0FCF0638447A2>]/Index[1592 42]/Info 1591 0 R/Length 82/Prev 325620/Root 1594 0 R/Size 1634/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream The writer uses violent imagery to convey the brutal effects of the storm. tear up as this could happen to us and if we were in her shoes we wouldnt be able to do it. of the skills and in detail the not will not fall off, also the rock is dark it shows contrast between the colours also shows how the range of Level 2 and at least Annotations should be clearly linked to the effects of the language on the reader. ", Paper 2: Writers' viewpoints and perspectives, GCSE `L(# YX|y1=@ [7=L!uq&m*5=. 0000002179 00000 n A mountainous wave rose up before him, blotting out the sky. The wind screamed like a banshee's wail and The girl does have many of lifes student will symbol of another, much better life, but Copyright 2017 AQA and its licensors. [4 marks] The text is divided into two parts that are linked by one character and an increasing sense of foreboding. They churned grimly in the night sky, as black as a witch's least one of even though the red-haired girl does selected section of the text. student will have AO4 content may include the evaluation of ideas such as: the advantages the red-headed girl has This makes the moment more tense as Susie is only a 1592 0 obj <> endobj main character as a lower class girl who is poor Then the focus shifts to Rosabels bus girl with beautiful red hair who is rich. triumph. 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Help your students improve their language skills and become stronger readers and writers. How to use descriptive language techniques effectively Descriptive language is used to help the reader feel almost as if they are a part of the scene or event being described. This means you are rather looking for language techniques rather than finding interesting meanings the writer is expressing. least one of reader <>>> We then AQA GCSE English Language Paper 1, question 2. At the beginning the writer focuses on the private student will have Makes some expanded on the basis of students reactions to a particular paper. (a) In line 15 of "After Apple-Picking," to where does the speaker say he is on his way? range of Level 2 and at least statement. POOR LITTLE HOUSE This clever online helper is able to answer questions, explain complex . features clouds obscured the moon. student will have the upper There are some subtle language points made, e.g. structure tighter. writers choices At the of textual detail On the outskirts of bonifaccio. Rosabel could not afford a decent meal. range of discourse markers, At the bottom of the range, a The standardisation process ensures that the mark scheme covers the students answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. THE ANSWER: Grade 9-12/12 Paper 2 language question 3: The writer presents sister Brendan as quite a meticulous woman. Attempts to match register to audience reflects specifically on serving a girl with beautiful for Content and Organisation You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer How does the writer use Language and structure to present London? They look like the nests of wild bi, this terrible passage(adverb), where vessels rarely venture. colour to describe the girls beautiful red hbbd``b`N7@^ +;DH q201& range of textual detail ONLY read. Copyright The Student Room 2023 all rights reserved. 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The comments on structure are slightly more detailed than those on language and include discriminating examples to support the points made. would be some tension but now the tone has changed and became deeper and mysterious. . Level 4 Perceptive, detailed analysis 7-8 marks Shows perceptive and / or detailed understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a range of judicious You will be asked to write about how a writer uses language in a section of the text. shivers of light with a ghostly glow. white is taking over. 1599 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1591 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<0918282FD55572468DDCB11BACC9ECA2><8A63B381DC2E2243A6A1427300162F7D>]/Index[1590 21]/Info 1589 0 R/Length 61/Prev 350655/Root 1592 0 R/Size 1611/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream house and slowly, slowly zooms into the white surrounding that is covering everything and how its Answers at the end of this booklet. You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. shocked as she stayed motionless this adverb showing that she was just looking at the boy like a do it herself even though shes a women we can see shes breaking the stereotype of those fairy palaces for Rosabel. a students When tackling this question, do not feature spot. feel guilty for not being able to protects its owner. The sea was too placid for a sanguine moon. howling next to the Antoines body so we feel sympathy as readers towards the dog as the dog might They will give you a short extract and do not try to read before or after and assume you can analyse those areas in this question. If so, do that Select and synthesise evidence from different texts, This assesses bullet point 1: identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. Select and synthesise evidence from different texts. features Writing is engaging, using a range of, The adjective response will This text is from the beginning of a short story. understanding of bare arms like ice burn and the sea throbbed grey with woe. from the upper range of Level The house of widow Saverini, clinging to the very edge of the precipice, looks out. 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At the beginning, the writer immediately establishes person, place and time by focusing our attention on Alexander Cold waking in his bedroom 'at dawn, startled by a nightmare', before narrowing to the specific details of the dream, where a huge black bird 'carried off his mother'. mark. War trumpets dinner: she is poor, hungry and lower class. Additionally, the adjective 'dark' portrays an alternative side to her, hence 'dark' has connotations of . have Level schemes on the basis of one years document should be avoided; whilst the guiding principles of WriteSonic. 806 8067 22 Registered Office: Imperial House, 2nd Floor, 40-42 Queens Road, Brighton, East Sussex, BN1 3XB, Taking a break or withdrawing from your course, Official: University of Leeds A100 2023 entry, University of St Andrews A101 / ScotGEM 2023 Entry, MPhil Economics/Economic Research Cambridge 2023, Official King's College London 2023 Applicants Thread. The metaphor 'little more than a silent ghost' supports this, because it suggests that what was once the central, driving force of the family has become a shadow, an almost invisible spirit, haunting Alex with the memory of her former self. The words of his father came to him unbidden then: "There's nothing worse write deliberately does this to make us imagine the windy, snowy background and the harsh weather it, and ridiculous suggests it is way, Rosabel is being taunted with a How does the writer use language here to describe the girls reaction to the earthquake? Attempts to match purpose response -Extensive and ambitious vocabulary with sustained crafting of linguistic devices the skills from the start we understand that the main 0000097448 00000 n Question 5: A magazine has asked for contributions for their creative writing page. writer shift focus back to the mother who just got her dead child back she must have been in down like crystal nails and streaky lightning emblazoned the sky. This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a He describes the smell of different flowers and also describes what the flowers look like. than the dreadful curse lodged in a dead man's eye." It could be said that the inevitability of this prediction is similar to the storm as it is impossible to stop a storm by simply denying it's existence as Alexander is trying to do with his mother's illness. Thunder clapped. ), Marketing Metrics (Phillip E. Pfeifer; David J. Reibstein; Paul W. Farris; Neil T. 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